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I want to rewrite the third paragraph. I use the word I way to many times. I just can't figure out a good way to say it.
SO any help would be greatly appreciated.

February 13, 2007

Dr. Someone
Superintendent of Schools
Something School Department
101 Street
SomeWhere, Maine 04096

Dear Dr. Someone,
I would love the opportunity to be interviewed for the kindergarten teacher position. With my degree in Elementary Education and teaching certificate, I am extremely interested in teaching kindergarten.

I have spent the past year in a self-contained classroom teaching ten students in kindergarten thru eighth grade. My experience has shaped me into an observant, flexible teacher dedicated to guiding students toward ongoing success. My lessons are differentiated to meet the needs of each individual student. I simultaneously taught basic addition skills to a kindergartner and multiplication facts to my third and fourth graders, while also keeping the other students on task. I am a master planner, and I can readily adapt my plans to accommodate a variety of educational backgrounds.

With these unique strengths, I write because I am returning to Southern Maine in June, and I seek a position as an elementary school teacher within the Something School Department.

I am excited about the possibility of a personal interview to further discuss my qualifications with you. I can be reached at (My number here). Thank you for taking the time to review my credentials and to consider me for employment with your district.

Best Regards,

Jaime Marie B

Enclousures
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Jaime owned by
Mya the dog
and the cats:Crash, Gabby and Tucker

How about this:

Before:

With these unique strengths, I write because I am returning to Southern Maine in June, and I seek a position as an elementary school teacher within the Something School Department.

After:

I am planning to return to Southern Maine in June and seek a position as an elementary school teacher within the Something School Department. I bring with me many unique strengths and a strong dedication to devote myself to enriching the lives of children.

Remember the dear little children. It might help to break into song, say Whitney Houston's "I belive the Children are our future, teach them well and let them lead the way..." at any interview... (I probably screwed the lyrics up, haven't heard the song since the 80s, pre-Bobby Brown)
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Tammy
Stanley and Pookey

Jamie,
Take a look at this as well. I liked Tammy's suggestion

Before:
I have spent the past year in a self-contained classroom teaching ten students in kindergarten thru eighth grade. My experience has shaped me into an observant, flexible teacher dedicated to guiding students toward ongoing success. My lessons are differentiated to meet the needs of each individual student. I simultaneously taught basic addition skills to a kindergartner and multiplication facts to my third and fourth graders, while also keeping the other students on task. I am a master planner, and I can readily adapt my plans to accommodate a variety of educational backgrounds

After:

For the past year, I have been teaching ten students in a self-contained classroom with various grade levels ranging from kindergarten through eighth grade. My experience this past year taught me to become flexible, observant, and to meet the needs of each student individually. For example, I simultaneously ----(carry forward with original)

Maybe this will help take away from so many "I's" at the beginning of each sentence. I think that is probably what is bothering you more than just using the "I".
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Boris's Human, Pam